The CLS Project

[Masked Dominion]

Well it said make a new topic and post here.

My comic is the CLS Project. CLS stands for Collective Life System.
It's a dramadey..no clue how thats spelt. It's meant to be funny but with a serious background story and whatnot.

I don't want to say too much of the story, I don't want to ruin it.

I'll update every week with a comic or otherwise, and I've already gotten 3 comics done.

So here they are..

//001//Arrival
http://img187.imageshack.us/img187/6247/0012ni5.png
//002//Introducing..
http://img293.imageshack.us/img293/1687/0026si1.png
//Filler001//The Advent Combine
http://img293.imageshack.us/img293/1308/referenceadventcombine1of7.png


Anyway, hope this meets your standards.
 
~The Masked Dominion

[Iris]

Um... There just isn't enough material for me to build up an opinion. I mean, your two pages are basically just nothingness. And your filler is just a character introduction page (and thank god it is not a filler cuz a filler after 2 pages is worrisome.)

For now, it's pretty bland... No sound effect, the art is pretty flat and there's a lot of panels that are pretty much nothing. Feels like wasted space and all, like you're trying to fill gaps but don't quite know how to. I get the feeling that what you submitted is equal to... well... nothing! I can't just go and say "OH THIS WILL BE GREAT!" or "OH THIS WILL SUCK!" (Though the guy that appears to be your main looks pretty emo-styled to me, and that's never too good.)

Is that all you have right now? I can't call anything at this point.

[Masked Dominion]

Well I'm doing one comic a week, so this is all I've done, I started three weeks ago, and one of said weeks was too hectic to draw a comic so I coloured some old art.

But yeah I get where your coming from, so I'll post again in a while once the story is started. On the emo thing, yeah he does. But this was honestly intentional. I'm trying to make him look sad...eh it's hard to explain without giving away the story too too much.

But yeah it's kinda bland right now. I'll post again in time once things get going. Thank you for your imput, I'm new with this and trying to improve. I guess I'll be back in a while with more. ( Also in comparison to the flatness of the last version of this comic, I've improved quite abit. http://thrustworthyentertainment.piczo.com/?g=21965668&cr=6 <-- Old version heh. )

~The Masked Dominion